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content/conclusion.tex

@@ -42,17 +42,18 @@
             \begin{itemize}
                 \item Preparation phase
                     \begin{itemize}
-                        \item Have complete life cycle: from problem description to system functionality
+                        \item The design method must cover the complete life cycle: from problem to final product
                         \item describe how to split the functionality into features.
-                        \item Incorporate software and hardware in decissions
+                        \item Incorporate software and hardware in the design process
                     \end{itemize}
                 \item Development tooling
                     \begin{itemize}
-                        \item Version Control to manage model versions
-                        \item Central design database, where models inherit from
+                        \item Modelling software should support version control
+                        \item Central design database, where models inherit their parameters from
                         \item Automated testing, for all models
                     \end{itemize}
                 \item Use hardware prototyping to its advantage
+                \item Always use a design team, with more than one developer
             \end{itemize}
         \end{block}
     }
@@ -180,13 +181,14 @@
         %notes
         \begin{block}{Future Iterations}
             \begin{itemize}
-                \item Involve experienced team
+                \item It must involve an experienced design team
                 \item Include adaptations from this thesis
                 \item Two strategies:
                     \begin{itemize}
                         \item Expand to full design model\\
                         include full life cycle
-                        \item Integrate in existing design models
+                        \item Integrate the development cycle and variable-detail approach 
+                        \item in existing design models
                     \end{itemize}
             \end{itemize}
         \end{block}
@@ -200,7 +202,7 @@
                 \item Two strategies:
                     \begin{itemize}
                         \item Expand to full design model
-                        \item Integrate in existing design models
+                        \item Integrate technique in existing design models
                     \end{itemize}
             \end{itemize}
         \end{block}

content/evaluation.tex

@@ -6,13 +6,13 @@
             \item Preparation Phase: the steps prior to the development Cycle
                 \begin{itemize}
                     \item What elements are required to describe a feature
-                    \item How should these features and their elements be defined
+                    \item How these features and their elements should be defined
                 \end{itemize}
             \item Development Cycle: That is performed for each feature
                 \begin{itemize}
                     \item The role of design and model in the process
                     \item Select which feature to implement
-                    \item Tooling required for Development
+                    \item Tooling required for the design method
                 \end{itemize}
             \item Design in General
                 \begin{itemize}
@@ -94,20 +94,22 @@
 
 
 
-        \begin{block}{Feature Definition}
             \begin{itemize}
                 \item The preparation phase determines 
                 \item functionality of the system
                     \begin{itemize}
-                        \item thus also the features
+                        \item thus also how the features are defined
                         \item which are developed into the final product
                     \end{itemize}
-                \item The simple set of steps: problem definition; requirements; initial design
-                \item difficult to design this simple system with
-                \item approach must also be able to determine features
-                \item of complex problems.
+                \item Eventhough the tweet on a whiteboard
+                \item is a fairly simple system.
+                \item It was still difficult to design the system
+                \item using the simple set of steps: problem definition; requirements; initial design
+                \item The rapid iterative design method needs an
+                \item approach for the development of the functionality
+                \item and thus the definition of features
+                \item and must be able to deal with complex problems as well.
             \end{itemize}
-        \end{block}
     }
     {
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@@ -203,9 +205,9 @@
             \item difficult to organize the levels of detail
             \item Model software must be compatible with version control
                 \begin{itemize}
-                    \item Allow atomic commits
-                    \item Make merging easy
-                    \item Possible to revert changes
+                    \item Allow atomic commits 
+                    \item Make merging easy 
+                    \item Possible to revert changes: not only the last one
                     \item Link and reuse other submodels
                 \end{itemize}
         \end{itemize}
@@ -350,6 +352,7 @@
     \customslide
     {
         %notes
+        the design process lacked a:
         \begin{block}{Development Team}
             \begin{itemize}
                 \item Missed design and software experience 
@@ -363,6 +366,7 @@
                 \item Requires multi-disciplinary design team
             \end{itemize}
         \end{block}
+        Attempting to design a complex system on your own, makes it even more difficult than it already is.
     }
     {
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content/introduction.tex

@@ -117,11 +117,11 @@
         my presentation starts with a:
         \begin{itemize}
             \item Brief introduction of design method
-            \item How I used the case study to test this method
-            \item What is the result of the case study
-            \item What did I learn from the case study
-            \item In the conclusion I adress the influence and adaptations
-            \item And the last this are the recommendations for future research
+            \item Then I explain how this is design method is applied using a case study
+            \item Followed by the result of the case study
+            \item In the evaluation I explain what I learned from the case study
+            \item As conclusion I will discuss the research objectives
+            \item And finaly some recommendations for future research
         \end{itemize}
     }
     {