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 \chapter{Introduction}
 \label{introduction}
 \section{Context of this Thesis}
-    \ac{cps} are computer systems which control and monitor a physical system.
+    \ac{cps} contain systems that control and monitor their included physical system parts \autocite{rajkumar_cyber-physical_2010}.
     This physical system is often a system of mechanical components which are deeply intertwined with the software components.
     Automobiles, robots, medical devices and even the smart grid are examples of \ac{cps}.
-    The complexity of \ac{cps} has gone from an embedded system that improved the fuel consumption of a car engine to a fully self-driving vehicle.
-    Although the complexity opens up more design possibilities, improved efficiency, and beter safety, it has downsides as well.
-    A major downside with the increasing complexity is the resulting increased developing cost and the decreasing reliability.
-    \textcite{broenink_rapid_2019} introduce a new design method for \ac{cps} that aims to deal with the downsides of the complexity.
-    Throughout this thesis, the term '\acl{ridm}' or abbreviated to \acs{ridm}, is used to refer to the design method by \textcite{broenink_rapid_2019}. \acused{ridm} %Set acronym to used. From here only small is set.
-    The \ac{ridm} adopts a design technique called rapid development that splits the development process into small individual steps
-    Where each of these steps are implemented and tested separately.
+    The complexity of \ac{cps} has gone from an embedded system that improved the fuel consumption of a car engine to a fully autonomous vehicle.
+    Although the complexity opens up more design possibilities, improved efficiency, and better safety, it has downsides as well.
+
+    Major downsides with the increasing complexity are the increasing developing cost and the decreasing reliability.
+    \textcite{broenink_rapid_2019} introduced a new design method for \ac{cps} that aims to deal with the downsides of the complexity.
+    Throughout this thesis, the term \emph{\acl{ridm}}, abbreviated to \acs{ridm}, is used to refer to the design method by \textcite{broenink_rapid_2019}. \acused{ridm} %Set acronym to used. From here only small is set.
+
+    The \ac{ridm} adopts a design technique called rapid development that splits the development process into small individual steps, where each of these steps are implemented and tested separately.
     Testing each individual step creates feedback on a short interval, finding errors in the design as early as possible.
-    In the worst case scenario, the time and resources spent on development from the error being made till the error being detected are lost.
-    The sooner an error is found, the less time and resources are wasted.
+    When a test reveals an error in the design, the worst case scenario is that all resources invested since the error was made are lost.
+    Errors are unavoidable, but detecting them as early as possible reduce the amount of lost resources.
 
     As part of the research, Broenink and Broenink performed a small case study.
     In this case study, they have designed a controller, and implemented the controller in software for a physical off-the-shelf system.
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 \section{Research Objective}
     \textcite{broenink_rapid_2019} present a case study in their paper, developing a software based control system following the \ac{ridm}.
     About the result of that case study they state that "this [case study] does not mean that the same techniques cannot be applied to the physical part of the system."
-    In this thesis, I will research whether the \ac{ridm} applies to the physical part of a \ac{cps}, to come to a design method that can be applied on both the physical and cyber (software) part of a \ac{cps}.
-    However, the paper makes no attempt to offer a comprehensive design method to be used out of the box.
-    The \ac{ridm} does not provide information about bringing a system into being, it does not address problem definition, specifications or initial design steps.
+    In this thesis, I research whether the \ac{ridm} applies to the physical part of a \ac{cps}, to come to a design method that apply on both the physical and cyber (software) part of a \ac{cps}.
+
+    The paper makes no attempt to offer a comprehensive design method to be used out of the box.
+    The \ac{ridm} does not provide information about bringing a system into being, it does not address problem definition, requirements or initial design steps.
     Another weakness is that the \ac{ridm} gives no explanation of how the design steps are executed, only specifying that they are used.
     The design method would have been more useful if the authors had made a complete design method available to accompany their paper.
-    To ensure that the \ac{ridm} can be assessed as a design method for \ac{cps}, I have the following research objectives:
+    To assess the \ac{ridm} as a design method for \ac{cps}, I set the following research objectives:
     \begin{itemize}
-        \item Extend the \ac{ridm} with a preliminary design phase.
-            This makes it possible develop a system for a given problem or idea, using this design method.
+        \item Extend the \ac{ridm} with a preliminary design phase, focussing on the physical part of \ac{cps}.
         \item Refine the \ac{ridm} to make the design steps more explicit with improved instructions.
-        \item Develop and perform a case study that tests and evaluates the \ac{ridm}.
+        \item Develop and perform a case study that tests and evaluates the \ac{ridm} as a design method for the physical part of \ac{cps}.
     \end{itemize}
-    Based on the results of the case study I will answer the following research questions:
+    Evaluation of the \ac{ridm} as a design method is done with the results of the case study as the following objectives:
     \begin{itemize}
-        \item Which techniques of the \ac{ridm} can be applied developing the physical part of \ac{cps}?
-        \item Which adaptations are required to make the \ac{ridm} suitable for developing the computation and physical part of \ac{cps}?
+        \item Assess the influence that applying the \ac{ridm} has on the design process for \ac{cps}.
+        \item Describe which adaptations are required for both the \ac{ridm} and the design method to establish a competent design process for \ac{cps}.
     \end{itemize}
 
 \section{Approach}
-    The goal of this thesis is to evaluate the \ac{ridm}, a design method by \textcite{broenink_rapid_2019}.
-    Their design method is evaluated in the form of a case study.
+    The goal of this thesis is to evaluate the \ac{ridm}, in the form of a case study.
     The case study consists of a \emph{design process}, developing a \ac{cps} according to the \ac{ridm}.
     Based on the results of the design process, the \ac{ridm} is evaluated.
     However, there are a couple of steps required prior to the start of the case study.
+
     The first step is to produce a concrete \emph{design plan} based on the design method.
     The concrete design plan improves the evaluation of the design techniques.
     The design method is presented in an abstract form which leaves room for interpretation.
     This abstract form hampers the evaluation process, as the ambiguity of the design method makes it difficult to point out flaws in the design method.
-    Therefore, I will assess the design method and add detail to make a more concrete design plan.
-    Because the design method focusses on the rapid development principles and modelling techniques, it does not cover the design steps outside of that focus.
-    These steps, like problem definition and system specifications, are a crucial part of the design process and are added to create the concrete design plan.
-    The added steps are based on the steps from the \emph{\ac{se}} approach.
+    Therefore, I assess the design method and add detail to make a more concrete design plan.
+    Because the \ac{ridm} focusses on rapid development principles and modelling techniques, it does not cover the design steps outside of that focus.
+    These steps, like problem definition and system requirements, are a crucial part of the design process and are added to create the concrete design plan.
+    The added steps are based on the steps from the \emph{\ac{se}} approach \autocite{blanchard_systems_2014}.
     \begin{figure}
         \centering
         \includegraphics[width=9cm]{graphics/approach.pdf}
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     The evaluation protocol consists of a list of questions that are evaluated for each design step.
     The protocols contains questions about the design method itself, thus evaluating the instruction of each design step.
     Other questions are about the design process, covering the execution of the instructions.
-    %There are questions that evaluate the design plan and there are questions that evaluate the design process.
     The other step is to provide the \emph{subject of design} to develop in the case study, essentially defining a problem that has to be solved.
     How all these components combine into the case study is shown in \autoref{fig:approach}.
 
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     However, the goal of this research is to use the design process to evaluate the design method, not to develop a product.
     A possible pitfall is that during the design process the developer finds a simple solution, such that the design techniques to deal with the increased complexity are left untouched.
     Therefore, it is important to guarantee a minimum level of complexity.
-    Instead of setting a problem that is very complex, I decided to require a minimum complexity to the solution.
+    Instead of defining a problem that is very complex, I decided to require a minimum complexity to the solution.
     This makes the design process complex enough, without requiring an excessive amount of development time or compromising the quality of the evaluation.
+
     Together with some other practical requirements, the best subject of design found is "Writing a tweet on a whiteboard".
     The subject of design is interesting because it has multiple design solutions that are complex but not unpractical.
-    Furthermore, it has some interesting dynamics, requires a control law, and can easily be constructed in to a prototype.
+    Furthermore, it has some interesting dynamics, requires a control law, and can easily be constructed into a prototype.
 
-    With a subject of design that requires a solution in the form of an object incorporating both physical and cyber parts to develop;
+    With a subject of design that requires a solution in the form of an object that incorporates both physical and cyber parts to develop;
     a design plan which describes how to develop this solution;
     and a protocol to evaluate the design plan and the development of the solution;
     the case study is executed.
     From the results of the case study I propose multiple improvements to the design method, not only for the physical part of \ac{cps} but also the cyber part.
 
 \section{Structure}
-    The overall structure of the study takes form of seven chapters.
-    The first two chapters introduce the used design methods.
+    The thesis is structured as follows:
+    The first two chapters introduce the design methods.
     \autoref{chap:background} gives a background of the \ac{ridm} and \ac{se} approach and how this is combined into the design plan.
-    The design plan is presented in full detail in \autoref{chap:analysis}, where each step is explained.
+    The design plan is presented in detail in \autoref{chap:analysis}, where each step is explained.
 
-    The next three chapters cover the method, execution, and evaluation of the case study.
-    \autoref{chap:case_method} is concerned with the methodology of the case study, introducing the subject of design and the evaluation protocol.
+    The next three chapters cover the case study:
+    \autoref{chap:case_method} explains the method of the case study, the subject of design and the evaluation protocol.
     \autoref{chap:case_experiment} documents the execution of the case study, showing the development during the design process.
     All the questions and observations that were administered by following the evaluation protocol during the case study are analysed in \autoref{chap:case_evaluation}.
     
-    The last two chapters will reflect on the design plan that is evaluated in this research.
+    The last two chapters reflect on the design plan that is evaluated in this research.
     \autoref{chap:reflection} uses the evaluation results of the case study to reflect on the design plan in this thesis.
     And finally, the research is concluded in \autoref{chap:conclusion}.

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